25 thoughts on “Challenge No.8”

  1. The rain poured down and splashed across the streets. It was a dark night, foggy night to be exact. It was hard to see through the mist and rain covering my windows. Gazing outside the windows, I saw a girl crying her eyeballs out in one of the houses. I could hear people whispering that she lost a competition final, but just when she thought she’d finished crying, the phone rang. She picked up the phone and answered. She instantly dropped the phone in shock. Was she accepted to go join a team or was she kicked out? We will never know.

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  2. Once there was a boy, the boy loved football even watching every single match. As he grew older, he was playing for a bad team. When he was playing, this guy came up and saw his performance and he signed me up to play for Arsenal. When the next day started, he woke up about 5 in the morning, he was ready to play for Arsenal. He was training in his backyard and he felt ready for the football match today. He was about to drive there until he slipped and fell even worse, just when he thought he had finished crying, the phone rang.

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  3. Once lived a girl named Aubrey. Aubrey was a stubborn gamer girl and she hated going out with her parents. Her family never left her sight and loved her so much until, something horrible happened.

    One day, her family went to a dinner party with her grandparents but she refused to go. She was starving for the rest of the day. Suddenly, a knock came on the door. It was the police and Aubrey had the worst news of her life. Her parents got into a big car crash. She started to tear up but just when she thought she’d finished crying, the phone rang. She immediately hung up.

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  4.                                                                The Police

    One rainy day, a girl called Hannah moved into an apartment. She was terribly hurt because her father died of cancer, and he was her only family member. Despite being lonely, she also felt nervous about her education. Sitting on the couch, she cried and cried. Just when she thought she’d finished crying, the phone rang. Moving towards the phone gently, she took a deep breath. Before she could stop herself, she took the phone and heard a voice saying “You must go to the police station or else…” Hannah gasped. Was that the police or was it a joke?

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    1. I love your use of fronted adverbials to add detail – it really helped me build a picture of what was happening!

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  5. As the boy sprinted quickly, out of the brown doors, it was already too late. The boy stared in shock, as he knew that it was too late. He missed the party. The house was dark, there were no people dancing, no music sound can be heard through his ears. He walked slowly as he opened the door. The door creaked open loudly. “Hello?” The boy asked as the voice echoed. He turned on the light as he called the party owner. There was no answer. The boy started to sob.

    Just when he thought he had finished crying, the phone rang.

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    1. This is gripping! I really want to know what happens next!! Why did he miss the party? Why was no one there? I really enjoyed reading this!

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  6. Jack in the Lonely House

    One delightful day, Jack woke up and he realized that the house was weirdly quiet. At first, he didn’t care so he walked out the door and started checking the house to see if his mom was there. Jack’s house was colossal, so he had a long way to check.

    When the last room was left to check, he started crying because he thought he had no hope left at all. His mom was not there! Jack was so incredibly sad, he started crying for so long. Just when he thought he’d finished crying, the phone rang.

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    1. Such a cliffhanger!! I really want to know who is on the phone! You chose some great adjectives to build a picture in your reader’s mind.

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  7. Once upon a time lived a girl name AY, she was 10 years old and an incredibly good basketballer. She went to the WNBA (Women’s national basketball association) 2 times and got MVP, she was in a team called the Lakers.

    One day AY lost and didn’t score one point. Just when she thought she’d finished crying, the phone rang. So, the owner of the WNBA (Larry Gottesdiener) and got the best WNBA Player in the world. Also, she had 10 Olympics gold medals. Then her dad called her she finally got ice cream with her dad

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  8. Welcome to Oak Grove Academy where all of your problems only get worse. Let me introduce you to a couple of people! First, we have Britney, the cry-baby. She might seem all popular if you’d ask me, but she might not have everyone wrapped around her finger. About the start of 5th grade, the students would have a welcoming 5th grade party but the only thing about it was, not every 5th grader would be invited. Students would do everything that they could to get invited into this party and guess what? Britney was NEVER invited. She was heartbroken and just when she thought she’d finished crying, the phone rang.

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  9. The Accident

    Lila, a happy 9-year-old girl lived happily with her parents. One day, Lila’s parents went to the countryside and promised to come back by tomorrow. Days and weeks passed and Lila’s parents never came back. Lila started to worry, thinking that they got into an accident. She cried and cried for days, just when she thought she’d finished crying the phone rang. Was it her parents? It was not, it was her doctor? He said that her parents got into a car crash, her mom died. Lila felt shocked as she dropped the phone she didn’t know what to do…….

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  10. Long ago there was a boy named Tom. one day, He participated in a math competition, but it was very difficult. At the beginning, he answered the questions fluently, but he only had the last question left, and he couldn’t remember it even if he thought about it. When it was time for the awards, he looked at the lecture hall with great anticipation, but the teacher did not call his name, and he was very sad. When he got home, he hid in his room and was crying . just wen he thought he’d finished crying, the phone rang. His mom complained to him and he went to sleep.

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